Friday, May 15, 2009

My first ever poem...

I was working on some calculations last night, and since my brain hates math so much, it went into zonked out mode, and when i recovered, i found that i had just written my first ever poem... if it qualifies as a poem... ;)

Was late into summer,
things started going wrong.
Clashing of our egos,
like hammer and tongs.

early into summer,
she had taken off the ring,
The tensions and the distance
Uncoiling like a spring.

The middle of the summer,
my hottest one yet.
We grew further apart,
our intentions never met.

Turning, twisting in my bed,
the wind outside blowing strong.
it suddenly hit me on my head
how could i let things go, oh so wrong!

And now i'm out to win her back,
i know its a mountain of a task.
The rains will bring me back solace,
but a little prayer from you is all i ask...

- Tomcat

60 comments:

Meetz said...

This is wonderful :) loved it!
so please change the stupid description of the blog part that says Arjun writes nonsense!!! ;) and as I said this one inspired me to write two ;)

unicorn said...

whoa!! kyato.. its awesome!! loved it.. :D

Pooja ...... said...

:D *hugs* im too lazy to copy paste the reply i sent u ..but u already know wat i think of it .. its friggin awesome :P .. ok wait , ill just copy paste it :P there u go - my first reaction to it :
OMFG its brilliant me love ~! :D

i especially love the first lines of each stanza .. its very cute for a first time attempt .. and

u know wat ? u can never write those hopelessly angst-filled , tragic , dramatic shit that some ppl try passing off as heartfelt poetry ...and thank god for that !

put it up on the blog NOW !


lotsa love n hugs
disloca

well , its on the blog now :P

Amazish said...

All I have to say is..I hope spring comes to you soon..in full swing..!

SenSeleSS Intelligence said...

disloca?????


wat the hell is disloca????

ranting_lil_whiner said...

@prateek-disloca is short for DISLOCAted brain. Or maybe a non existant one. U choose

Arjun M said...

dude its dislocated knee...

Pooja. You've spoken to her, JUST before the time YOU dropped the glass of water on me...


:P

Peregrine said...

CHICK FIGHTTTTTTTTTTTTTT !!!!!!!!!!!


**munches popcorn**

ranting_lil_whiner said...

tone wat down arjun? my shitty angst ridden pathetic excuses for poetry?

Arjun M said...

Aing??

:O

ranting_lil_whiner said...

what? don tell me she's zapped ur brains of all concious thought

Arjun M said...

i edited that comment for a REASON...

Sharky said...

**Slluuurrrrrrrrrppppppp**

damn no ice in the pepsi


**Watches fight getting more intewesting**

Arjun M said...

if you calm down enough, you'll see i'm not taking sides :)

ranting_lil_whiner said...

yes i knw. always the angel aren't u

ranting_lil_whiner said...

dont get me started on you. I'm not angry at u. dont make me

Arjun M said...

aye fruiter, try these new fries amigo! :D

goes well with the chilli sauce!

Sharky said...

**Munch munch munch munch**

**BURP**

**SLURPPPP**


Whack him wit ur purse aishu

ranting_lil_whiner said...

no sharky i'm now thinking.... is he actually worth my time and energy? same goes to pooja

Arjun M said...

PURSE!! LMAO

she not angry with me :P dincha notise?

@ aish
btw, got anything to say abt the POEM? :)

Arjun M said...

dude why is SHE getting ticked off?

does she think poojaz comments were directed at HER by any chance? :|

Sharky said...

ok so she doesnt have a purse....


WHACK HIM WITH UR WALLET aish...


n fill it with coins before u do ;)

ranting_lil_whiner said...

no. i dont. cept that its pretty okay for an amateur

Arjun M said...

Thanks!

ranting_lil_whiner said...

wow arjun..ur so smart...i'm bowled over by ur intelligence...

Arjun M said...

i take that as a compliment :)

not many ppl have said tht to me before...

Arjun M said...

***note to self***

LAWRENCE!! why are you slapping a monkey, boy!

HE STARTED IT!!

who's evolved...

** grumble grumble **

WHOZ EVOLVED??

...........

ranting_lil_whiner said...

i'm being sarcastic in case u didnt notice

Sharky said...

The sarcastic one said that she has better things to do and is off doing them...Cheerio

Arjun M said...

Oh you mean ran away...

hmm.

ranting_lil_whiner said...

ran away? good joke. almost as good a joke as...

Sharky said...

**Stops hand filled with popcorn in mid air**


ALMOST AS GOOD A JOKE AS................................???????????!!!?!?!?!?!?!?!??!?!?!?!?!

ranting_lil_whiner said...

*empties bowl of popcorn on ur head* nothing! because wat i was gonna saw was really really bitchy and i'm not that mean!

ranting_lil_whiner said...

i mean wat i was gonna say....

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•fяozєN ŧђoμgђŧร• said...

dat was cool.. i enjoyed the summer part! ;)

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